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Title: Epilogue 14 Dec 2015 3:36 am
Reviewer: lilyflower101 (Signed) [Report This]
    I loved this story so much!!!! :)
Title: Epilogue 18 Sep 2015 10:00 pm
Reviewer: Dream Painter (Signed) [Report This]
    A very interesting take on the proposed challenge. Nicely done, Pan. It made for a fun read.
Title: Epilogue 22 Mar 2015 2:42 am
Reviewer: bridgeportfox (Signed) [Report This]
    I'm glad that Harry finally found a family. It must have been hard for Hermione though.
Title: Epilogue 20 Mar 2015 1:29 am
Reviewer: shadowienne (Anonymous) [Report This]
    This story turned out to be quite a surprise. I can't even imagine being related to Bellatrix! (Or married to her, for that matter.) But you carried off the twist nicely, although I would have liked to see a few more chapters dealing with the family dynamics, as well as Voldemort's defeat. Hope you're over your writer's block!
Title: Epilogue 19 Mar 2015 1:33 am
Reviewer: Nightshade sydneylover150 (Signed) [Report This]
Title: Epilogue 18 Mar 2015 7:16 am
Reviewer: darkorangecat (Signed) [Report This]
    I really enjoyed reading this. It was very nicely executed. Cool idea.
Title: Epilogue 17 Mar 2015 10:07 pm
Reviewer: rosina (Signed) [Report This]
    Quite a few surprises in the storyline. Hope its got you back in the writing mood.

    Author's Response: Yes it did thanks. I know it was short chapters and not much substance, but it really helped. One day, I will make it better.
Title: Epilogue 17 Mar 2015 7:19 pm
Reviewer: Henna Hypsch (Signed) [Report This]
    Thank you, I liked the story. I think the short chapters were kind of neat and I appreciated the way you showed us the development, in action and in dialogue, instead of explaining things squarely. That kept the suspense up.

    Author's Response: Oh, thank you. I am sorry that the chapters were so short, but did that on purpose to help me along, and not to get overwhelmed.
Title: Epilogue 17 Mar 2015 11:17 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Nice! I liked it! :D Thanks for trying out the challenge!

    Author's Response: Thank you. I will one day expand on the story to meet the challenge better, but the challenge helped me to get past my writer's block, because it was so awesome.
Title: Epilogue 17 Mar 2015 2:37 am
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) [Report This]
    That was an interesting story. You've got a good beginning. I would've liked more background and more detail.

    How did Bellatrix and Severus become a couple? Did she ever marry LeStrange? Did Severus ever get over Lily? Was this a marriage of love or convenience?

    Did James and Lily know? How did Hermione's parents react? They raised her for 13 years. I would assume they would still want to be in her life. How did Sirius react? Remus? Ron?

    How did Voldemort rise again? How exactly did they defeat Voldemort? What was the potion? I had assumed it was some type of blood adoption potion. How did Voldemort find out their true identities?

    A suggestion to make it easier to read: instead of having 10 chapters that are 150 to 400 words each, have it be a one-shot. At max, it should be 2 chapters of about 1,500 words.

    One more thing: It's not "Wormwood". It's Wormtail.

    Author's Response:

    OOps, I will change that.

    It was just meant to get me back into writing, and I just wanted short, mini chapters, for it to not  feel to overwhelming, but I still needed the break to set up the chain of events. Hee hee.  Wormwood. where the heck did I get that from. lol. Oh, wait. Matilda! That must be where. lol 

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