This was a wonderful story in so very many ways! What a beautiful alternate setting you placed them in - wonderfully and believably detailed, with rich and necessary OCs. Your world-building was flawless. I loved the various relationships Harry developed with the OCs, as well as with Severus and Draco over time. I also found the dynamic between the various school groups - and eventually their participation in the final battle - believable and interesting in their different approaches to magic. This really was a fantastic read, and I enjoyed every single chapter. Thank you so much!
I actually admire Axle for asking if Harry did it--he at least tried to learn Harry's side of the story, unlike so many others (staff & students alike) who made false assumptions. I've had the experience of having someone spread false claims about me, and NOBODY she told ever asked for my side of the story. People who knew me better and heard me tell what she'd accused me of said, "But you'd never do something like that!" So, I learned a valuable lesson: Always try to learn both sides! Axle is very fair minded, but Harry misinterpreted why he asked the question. Can't blame him, really, after everything he's been through, but still... We can all learn from Axle! 😊
|Title: Oh And Harry…
||19 Jun 2021 11:38 pm
|Reviewer: hydra (Signed)
i wanna read this fic but will it end nicely
JAWorley, I give you a full round of applause and standing ovation for this story! I think my favorite parts were the scenes that took place at Gemini. I was fascinated by your descriptions of the islands and the different classes, it was by far my favorite part.
I really liked the diagrams and maps of the cabins and island, it helped SO much in helping me visualize things, and it was clear you really cared about this story and out a lot of thought into it.
I have some constructive criticism as well, but please don’t take it to heart because the last thing I want is to put you down! I felt like the story after leaving Gemini was a little more clumsy, a little less thought out. I saw your note saying that you didn’t have plans for that part of the story, so all things considered you did a really good job winging it! But I would have liked to see some more interaction between Harry and Snape, and sometimes things just went so fast and left some loose ends (like how did Narcissa know Harry was Snape’s son? Not even Snape knew, and nobody else seemed to pick up on any family resemblance.)
To end on a good note, thank you for writing this and giving me something to binge and enjoy for the past week! Your world building is incredible, and I hope you feel proud of this work because you deserve all the praise!
Author's Response: Hey, the constructive criticism is important, because I like to hear how people are feeling about the story and what they felt could be improved. That's one of the ways to improve as a writer and I always try to improve. Sometimes I try to leave things as a mystery, like how Narcissa knew, because it's a mystery to the main character that he hasn't figured out yet. I'm glad you liked the story, and don't ever feel bad about leaving me constructive criticism :) The only time I don't like criticism is when people aren't constructive about it, but you were and I've taken everything you've said under advisement for future stories. Thanks again!
Awesome story! Love the ending and way Harry defeated Voldemort. Thanks for all the time you took to write it!!! :)
This story reminded me a lot about "Camp". Although it is longer and more serious. I think I prefer "Camp" (and the earlier HP books).
I especially like your use of OCs. Authors who don't use them usually have minor characters compleatly OOC. And your OCs are complex characters with feelings, pasts and relationships. I like that!
Beautiful ending. I have been faithfully following this story for ages and I am so thrilled you finished it. It is definitely a classic fanfic in my opinion. Thanks for sharing your imagination with us!
|Title: Sons And Fathers
||04 Aug 2020 5:11 pm
|Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
Thank you so much for your entertaining and of course, well written story.
Thank you for finishing it and sharing it with us.