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Title: Chapter 40 10 Sep 2021 2:06 am
Reviewer: Cayj (Signed) [Report This]
    It's been a while since the last update and I'm not begging for one -- just hoping you're doing okay and that you and your family are safe (if that's the reason for the delay)

    Author's Response: Couple reasons for the delay. 1: Bit o' writers block. 2: Work stuff. Covid cases are up so I'm having to work a loooot more. I work 12 hour shifts and basically work and go to bed. Wear a mask y'all! 3: Just a touch o' depression rearing its ugly head. Still working on this fic, so not to worry, it's just taking longer than expected.
Title: Chapter 40 21 Aug 2021 11:24 pm
Reviewer: LtsHrIt4ThBoys (Signed) [Report This]
    I knew that Fulgur was Latin for lightning from looking up fulgurites; the glass tubes formed when lightning strikes the ground or sand. Nice concept there, DP!

    So, perhaps a higher dose of the Fulgur potion or maybe dripping it directly on Elias' scar?

    I love that Frank and Alice seem attuned to what Elias is experiencing! This is the first story I've read that has the Longbottoms up and mobile; usually, it's only Alice giving Neville a candy wrapper. I love the stories where a cure is found and they at least get to be with Neville.
    You notice that Rowling only uses them as a plot point of sympathy for Neville but never cares enough to mention them again.
    Y'all may love her but her series makes me afraid for her children!🤨

    Thanks and I'm looking forward to the next chapter too!🤗
    You might have to let me know when you post again through a FFN PM, as the "Track this story" link seems to be broken too!😣

Title: Chapter 38 21 Aug 2021 9:22 pm
Reviewer: LtsHrIt4ThBoys (Signed) [Report This]
    Okay, Hidden Major Plotline "game":

    The Cruciatus Curse sends electrical-like impulses to *all* the nerves in the body --sort of like having a full-body cattle prod touching every single nerve ending in the body-- including the electrical synapses in the brain, not unlike the original electro-shock therapy.

    Elias nerves and muscles are reacting as though they're *still* being stimulated, like a full-body "Tens Unit" set on high with intermittent and randomized area settings.

    So, might connecting Elias to some form of electrical conduit to *pull* the remaining electrical impulses out of his body reverse the effect? Or might exposing him to an area of high electrical concentration increase his core and rejuvenate his nerves and synapses?

    I knew that the research that Harry/Elias began into electricity's correlation to magic was going to turn out to be of vital importance.

    Wasn't the research that Grindelwald was doing on mundane and magical prisoners at Nurmengard of a similar nature? I know the Nazis (and the British and Americans) did similar experiments in the concentration camps and the two were working together.

    Well, let me know how close I came.

    I couldn't have stood hearing Elias begging me to take him home! It broke *me* and I'm not his father!
    If I'd have been Severus, I'd have called an elf to take a letter of Leave/Sabbatical or Resignation to the whiskered wanker. Called for Dobby (I'm sure he's still loyal to Harry no matter the changes!) to come and ready Spinner's End with certain changes to accommodate a very sick child. Called a Hogwarts elf to pack up his Professor's quarters and labs and take them to Spinner's End. Asked St. Mungos if they had a service that provided Home Nursing care, possibly full-time, and told the staff at St. Mungos to ready my child for discharge!
    Between Severus, Remus, Dobby (and possibly Winky), and any Home Care Nurse I'm sure they could care for Elias just as well as St. Mungos!

    The Janus Thickey Ward is where they *WAREHOUSE* people when there's no hope for recovery, like Neville's parents! No way is my CHILD being put there!

    BTW, If the Super Secret Awesome Hidden Major Plotline does turn out to be a form of electrical cure for Elias I bet it would work for the Longbottoms too! 🤞

    I'm so glad Severus trusted the Gryffindorks! You said in an earlier AN that this next arc would be "chaos"; I sure hope that doesn't mean that Sirius is going to do something stupid!

    See you soon!
    I hope you're still working on the rest of this story? I hate getting super invested in a WIP, but sometimes it's worth it even if it's never been finished.🥺
    Thanks, darlin!
Title: Chapter 37 21 Aug 2021 5:44 pm
Reviewer: LtsHrIt4ThBoys (Signed) [Report This]
    Glad to hear it's "coming together soon"👍 but here's my thing: If someone tells me that they believe they've found the cause of my child's/loved one's deteriorating condition and the catalyst is one that could re-occur at any time...

    If say, my child is found to have a lesion on his brain and the lesion has caused brain-damaging seizures at least twice, further exacerbating a pre-existing condition and can re-occur at any moment going forward, I'm going to demand that the "lesion" be immediately removed!
    Of course, I'm not from in many ways, a *backward*, Victorian-era society that's not only *not* privy to "mundane" medical advancements but would probably sneer at the suggestion due to the perception** that *we* are a primitive and "backward" society, but I do have to wonder what say, 70 rads of targeted radiation would do to old Voldy-splinter or even a sonic scalpel or laser surgery that was just beginning to be experimented with, in 1995?

    My 1st point being that the "soul container" is obviously *physically* inside the scar or it would *not* cause bruising and swelling and can, therefore, be dealt with *physically*; Severus just needs to think outside of the magical box!

    And my 2nd point is that I'm *not* going to consult with others, come to a conclusion about the cause of my loved one's life-threatening condition and go back to work! So NOT HAPPENING!

    When I came back home in 2019 after our brief separation, and I found out that Terry's Drs had found a *tumor* beneath his breast bone and that they'd *still* done nothing to follow up nor do further diagnostics(!) I was ENRAGED! I immediately got on the phone and burned up some ears and got the ball rolling!

    Turns out, they weren't terribly eager to DO *anything* because they gave Terry a "20% chance of /survival/" ("So, why should we do anything", was their thought process! Bastards!) But guess what? They KILLED the tumor in *six weeks*! Then they went on to kill his liver and then kill him! It almost feels like they were mad that someone forced them to do the *right* thing, so they retaliated! Not really, but sort of...

    I'm an action kind of person, so if there is an action that *can* be taken or *should* be taken, I want it done!

    **subtly encouraged by Dumbasf*** to promote his "Greater Good" agenda as once proposed during his planning with Grindelwald for ruling over the "muggles" for "[our] own good".

    I get the warning that it's going to maybe get worse than here, but only if someone lets slip to Dumbasf***!

    Thanks, darlin'! And thanks for letting me know about the reply feature being on the "fritz"!👍
    Appreciate ya!🤗
Title: Chapter 36 21 Aug 2021 7:03 am
Reviewer: LtsHrIt4ThBoys (Signed) [Report This]
    Elias at this point is really hard to read: Terry, my late hubby, fell into a tequila bottle in 2016 to "self-medicate" after weaning himself off over-prescribed pain pills. The onset of alcohol-induced dementia in late 2018 had *me* 1st trying to get him medical help and then get him into a "program" which he refused and finally had me fleeing for my own safety.

    Six months later he called to say he'd quit drinking, was sorry, and that he wanted me to come home. I came home.

    When going through cancer treatment, the Drs decided to put in a "port" for the 4 chemo treatments they'd scheduled and the "after treatment" they'd already planned to do. 3 days later, after the 1st chemo, the port was discovered to be producing bacteria. He was hospitalized for 20 days in Dec. of 2019 and suddenly experiencing severe dementia-like symptoms which abated just prior to his being discharged, but reoccured approximately a week before his 2nd biotherapy treatment and only worsened as the treatments went on.

    Dementia is a scary, scary thing! The person you love becomes a hateful, scary person and all you can do is hide the guns and anything else that he might try to hurt you with. The neighbors hear yelling and think *you're* the "bad guy"! Thank God the investigator they sent out *saw* firsthand what I was dealing with and gave *me* a card in case it got out of hand and *I* needed help.

    I never imagined that I wouldn't get to say goodbye to the man I fell in love with and married. The hospital took that decision from me!

    When *I* refused to allow them to euthanize him --they proposed to anesthetize him --*not* "sedate", *anesthetize* as if for surgery!-- and remove his oxygen and let him suffocate!--, they had me banned from the hospital as his advocate and DID IT ANYWAY!

    I found out later that the state of TN changed the laws, so you can't file charges against the Doctors or hospital nor can you sue them for wrongful death.

    So, not only did I have to watch my husband mentally disappear, but then I didn't even get to say goodbye to my love.

    I can't give you a 10 for the chapter just because it's so very heartbreaking and scary. :(
Title: Chapter 35 21 Aug 2021 5:20 am
Reviewer: LtsHrIt4ThBoys (Signed) [Report This]
    Well, fine! I've been thinking that *everybody* pronounces Elias as *everyone* pronounces the Biblical name of Elisha (E-leye-sha); *nobody* pronounces it E-lee-sha!
    I couldn't believe when I watched a clip from one of the HP movies on YT (I wouldn't watch the movies on a bet! But I like to watch Alan Rickman anytime!) that they pronounced Lucius as Loo-see-us! Most ridiculous thing I ever heard! The American pronunciation is Loo-SHus!

    According to the Oxford Dictionary pronunciation guide: "ci", "si", and "ti" before and after a vowel are always pronounced "sh". Thus, Lucius = Loo-SHus. Leave it to the Brits (Aussies ARE Brits) to mess up a good thing! These are the same people who pronounce "aluminum" (al-loom-ee-num) as al-you-mini-um! There's no extra "i" after the "n"! Idiots!

    I've been calling him Eli for short cuz *that's* what *I* know.

    Now, that we're past that silliness: I was scared when he kept slurring that the anoxia had caused him brain damage which would be tragic!

    Sev *has* to get that damn thing out of him! I don't think he'll survive another curse!

Title: Chapter 34 21 Aug 2021 4:30 am
Reviewer: LtsHrIt4ThBoys (Signed) [Report This]
    Nope, I didn't!😏 I just hoped that *Remus* wouldn't!

    Good! Sev needed someone else to share this secret with. Remus was a good choice.

    I just *love* how Sev keeps taking the wind out of Umbitch's sails!

    Now, he just needs to brew an undetectable poison for the bee-ahtch OR something to make her start spouting paranoid rantings...permanently!

Title: Chapter 33 21 Aug 2021 4:12 am
Reviewer: LtsHrIt4ThBoys (Signed) [Report This]
    Good, Hermione, think it through; don't go rushing off half-cocked again. Lupin's not a bad choice to go to IF he's not fully still in the MOB's knickers!

    Aw, poor baby!! My heart feels for him!

    They should have put him back into the healing sleep before taking him to the Hospital Wing, then he'd have slept through the portkey!

    Well, maybe if he sees that the portkey didn't take him anyplace bad, it'll help the residual trauma. I hope!

Title: Chapter 32 21 Aug 2021 3:56 am
Reviewer: LtsHrIt4ThBoys (Signed) [Report This]
    YES! Now you're using that incredible brain, Sev!

    Good! Get Shannon!🤗

Title: Chapter 31 21 Aug 2021 3:45 am
Reviewer: LtsHrIt4ThBoys (Signed) [Report This]
    Good, Sev, *good*! I'm so glad he didn't dismiss what the rat-bastard said out of hand! When Elias wakes up ask him if he dreamed of the meeting? What did he see? Did he see the evil wanker kill Nott? Did he experience Sev being crucioed?

    If Sev would just think it through he'd realize that Eli *isn't* "relapsing", he's experiencing being freshly crucioed! The effect must be cumulative as this time he almost died!

    You're doing an infinitely better job of *honestly* conveying the effects of the crucio curse through Harry's scar than in canon! I thought it typical of Rowling to dismiss Harry *feeling* the crucio, yet no one ever thought to offer HIM treatment after one of his visions!

    Hmmm, so Shannon *doesn't* know that the child that Dinkless brought to her with the dark magic surrounding him and the cut on his forehead and Sev's son Elias are the same child. I would have still figured that her scans would pick up the dark energy from the Horcrux, though!

    Well, Sev's going to *have* to do something soon or Moldy is going to kill him or permanently damage him unknowingly!

    Poor Teddy! Well, at least the murder of his mother and baby sister have been avenged! Cold comfort maybe, but that's how I'd see it.

    Whew, tough chapter!😢

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