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Reviews For Midnight Winter
Excellent chapter, the looming feeling of danger was well portrayed but there was a glimmer of hope, thank you
Great chapter!!!!
loved this so much! Though I must admit, I'm a bit worried that Harry might develop an identity crisis with how Snape is demanding he change everything that makes him him—especially considering Harry didn’t come from the most stable or loving background. But I trust you’ll make an amazing story either way. I just hope Snape knows what he’s doing and is ready for any ramifications. Also, I can’t wait for the next chapter. Thank you! Author's Response: It's possible but this is for his own safety and Harry did always wish he could be normal without his scar, once he knew how he got it. It might be a nice change for him. Unfortunately his appearance is too much Potter recognizable among wizarding society so Severus's family would know instantly that Harry Potter isn't his son if he looked like himself and be more upset that he lied and tried to pass Potter Jr. off as his spawn.
Excellent start! Author's Response: Thank you.
Great chapter! Author's Response: Thank you.
Author's Response: It's because Harry Potter as he looks is too recogniazble to the Prince family and any other wizard out there. Snape can't very well show up with James' Potter's spawn trying to pass the kid off as his own. They'd see right through that. This is also in a way to protect him from going into Ministry custody or from death eaters who may stop by though Severus is a private man in my opinion who doesn't talk about his life.
Thank you a very dramatic chapter. I loved the descriptions of the schools, very inventive. Author's Response: Thank you. I wanted to flesh out the world a bit more with more schools, originally they were written for a harry potter rp spanning multiple schools that I never committed to finishing on ff.net.
I liked the description of the multiple magical schools. Good summary in the last paragraph. Author's Response: Glad you like it.
I like the premise but even reading the third chapter there seems to be a continuity issue. It goes from Snape bringing him inside fixing his leg and offering hot chocolate and Harry reading his letter to it all being decided. But why would Harry assume they think he is Snapes son? That's never discussed there is no conversation between Harry and Snape where Snape asked him to be his fake son. There is also no conversation other then Harry saying he was dumped by the Dursley's that explains why Harry need to stay with Snape and hid with a alternate identity also how dose if go from he is annoying and I'm only looking after him for Dumbldoor to I want him as my fake son? And how has Snape already told them the name they just made up? And why did he pretend to have a son in the first place.I love the idea of the story and I love all the details about the schools but it feels like there ina chapter missing where they talk about the issues / situation and decide on what's happening is not even clear if this is a temporary fake son situation or forever Author's Response: Dumbledore has no idea that Harry is there. He assumes that Harry is in Little Whinging, where he should be, with Petunia watching him. Remember, in chapter 1 Hogwarts shut down indefinently. As for the issue of Snape telling his family about having a son, this will be addressed in the next chapter.
Thank you for updating your excellent story. im a little confused they went from Severus offering hot chocolate to Harry reading the letters and assuming he was the son mentioned in the letters. I think you missed the part where Severus asked or told him he would be acting as his son. Never mind it was still excellent. Author's Response: It's brought up in the third chapter. |
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