it's actually funny how snape dabbed Harry's fingers in every cauldron ??? anw poor harry
it's actually funny how snape dabbed Harry's fingers in every cauldron ??? anw poor harry
Draco be like: I messed with Neville's not my own! I don't know how to make it lie, I just know how to make it not work!
Slytherins and Gryffindors be like: WTF just happened? Nobody knows? Okay, least we're all just equally confused.
Snape: having a meltdown off stage.
Harry: having a meltdown ON stage.
"...hope dangling on a string,like the slow spinning redemption he'd always wanted..." I love your turns of phrase! Terrific opening chapter!
Excellent - that was a stunning divergence from a perfectly normal day, wasn't it?
| Title: Paternis Sentimentis
| 08 Mar 2011 8:34 pm
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| Reviewer: projectjay (Anonymous)
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Wow! Great start JA.
Poor Harry. I really hope that Snape comes around. Harry "does" deserve a family. Even if it "is" Snape! LOL!
OMG. As wonderful as ever. That was an awful way to start the story, keeping all of us(well, at least me) biting our nails and lips, crossing our fingers waiting for more, wondering what will happen... ARGH. Wonderful wonderful wonderful.
| Title: Paternis Sentimentis
| 04 Feb 2011 4:55 am
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| Reviewer: lex (Anonymous)
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Harry seems a bit needy, but overall, a decent start.
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