I'll beta for you. Good story so far!
i really enjoyed reading this and surely severus doesn't have to tell albus everything he does, albus would of tried to interfere anyway, so in my opinion severus did the right thing. harry will be extremely shocked and angry as he and snape don't get along at all well
| Title: The beginning
| 08 Jun 2008 12:00 pm
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| Reviewer: Eternity (Anonymous)
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First of all, I was/am surprised that Prof. Snape took the news that well; i thought he'd go into complete shock & think it was a trick of some sort.
Just one thing though; when Lily put the memories into the pendant, the memory of her putting the memories into it & then sending them of somewhere, she would only have been able to put up to where she withdrew the memory from her mind into the pendant,
Great story, keep updating.
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| Title: The beginning
| 25 Dec 2006 2:07 am
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| Reviewer: amanda (Anonymous)
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please update soon great story
GOOD START. I WILL BE WATCHING FOR UPDATES--WHICJ I HOPE COME QUICKLEY!
Hurry up and UPDATE!!!! And when Albus sees the contents of the letter, he should be ecstatic. After all, the "protections" are worthless, Harry is of Sev's blood, and is therefore safer with Sev. COngratulations, I love it.
| Title: The beginning
| 07 Jun 2006 9:55 am
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| Reviewer: catti666 (Anonymous)
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Ahh, I never get tired of these SEveritus stories! It really looks like a good start, please post again soon!
Wonderful Begining. I always thought that Lily and Severus had something going on but your possibility is a good one as well. I mean why should a couple of Aurors decide at that time to have a child? Same with the Longbottoms. It's either very irresponsible or just plain stupid or an accident. Anyway I love the beginning and hope to see more of it soon. Especially Harrys reaction, when Harrys glamour comes down and maybe you let Harry, in case Harry "dies" or goes "missing" Sebastian Severus Williams in Slytherin and let him live as Severus son?^.^ Love ya and anticipate already the next chapter.
| Title: The beginning
| 04 Jun 2006 11:04 pm
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| Reviewer: MinervaGranger (Anonymous)
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Hurry Up and Update. THis is a great story, and I can't wait to read the rest of it.
Hm, well it seems like you have some good ideas for the story. However you could use some help with characterization and grammer. But don't get discourage! Just ask someone to look over it and give suggestions. I do look forward to seeing more! :D
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