Ahh man, I love this story! Please update again, I REALLY want another chapter. Please? The characters are done woderfully!
I could not care more if you killed off everyone, this is great! Bring on the angst! It's so emotional, I love it. :)
I love this story. :D. You have created a fantastic post-Voldemort story here. Love it and need more chapters! .lol. Great fic. ;)
| Title: Fist of Fury
| 17 Apr 2007 2:47 pm
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| Reviewer: Amaruk Wolfheart (Anonymous)
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| Title: Fist of Fury
| 17 Apr 2007 1:21 am
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| Reviewer: curlybean3 (Anonymous)
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Yah! Three of my favorite things in one story....Harry, heroic and hurt, Snape, angry, but in a parental kind of way and Remus, just being Remus.
Great start. Looking forward to more.
Hey Aislynne! :) I noticed that you used "dahm" a lot. If you were trying to avoid a different word, you should try using a Wizarding equivalent, like "Merlin". just a suggestion. :)
| Title: Fist of Fury
| 16 Apr 2007 9:50 pm
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| Reviewer: AllyKat (Anonymous)
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What does "dahm" mean? Do you mean "Damn", the epithet? If you do, could you use the right word?
A word of literary advice. Misspelled words are annoying. If your character is saying 'damn,' you should spell it right. Misspelling it does not change the word, merely annoys the readers.
| Title: Fist of Fury
| 16 Apr 2007 12:34 am
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| Reviewer: Vicki (Anonymous)
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This is as great as the last! I adored Snape being protective and cranky at Harry for the pushups, and Dumbledore earned that punch and more long ago. Couple questions--one, how did Snape become Harry's guardian? Two, why would it cause problems with Dumbledore if he discovered Remus knew where Harry was? (This is probably blindingly obvious and I'll pick it up when I reread this and am a bit more coherent, but oh well.) Can't wait for more!
Now that's a cliffhanger with teeth to it!
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