Okay. I'm really enjoying this story - I think it's a brilliant idea - but I do have one or two complaints.
Firstly, given that she's suggesting her own sister should be Kissed, don't you think Andromeda Tonks is being a little heartless? I know we don't see much of her character in the books, but I can't help thinking that, given she's lost most of her family, she might be a little reluctant to have her sister killed/Kissed, even if they haven't spoken for years.
Also, and this is just a nit-picking thing that comes from being British, we have streets. Not blocks. That's purely American.
| Title: Chapter 6 - Food
| 16 Mar 2008 1:08 am
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| Reviewer: Tracy (Signed)
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OK, here's the plan, no more school or work for you! From now on, you just write for my entertainment. Of course, I'm willing to be magnanimous enough to allow others to enjoy your stories too, mustn't be selfish or anything. What? I think it's a good plan! OK, so there are some small flaws in it like, writing fanfiction doesn't pay except in feedback and you can't actually live off feedback, but I'm working on those details. LOL! I know I say this about all your stories hon, but this was brilliant!
Tracy
Thank you so much for updating! I've been looking forward to this chapter! I love how arrogant Snape is when he thinks he's going to leave in the afternoon. Ha ha, I doubt it.
I love this story. You've got so much potential for growth in characters here. I can't wait for Harry and Draco to start getting along, but I'm sure it will take some time. I think you also did a great job with Harry and Snape's interaction. Snape won't want Harry to be the one to help him, so he snarks. Harry is just too depressed and tired to really fight back, but he also knows it's best not to. Eventually, this will give Snape food for thought. Now I'm ready for Harry to rein Kreacher in. ;-)
| Title: Chapter 6 - Food
| 04 Mar 2008 5:38 pm
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| Reviewer: Ayana (Anonymous)
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I REALLY love your story, please update soon
OOh, what's happening to Draco? Poor thing, I feel sorry for him. Can't wait fo rthe next bit, thank you!
-Elise
Great, great!! :) Fantastic chapter. I'm so happy it was updated! Thank you!
this is great, don't change a thing! please update!
| Title: Chapter 5 - Searching Alleys
| 20 Feb 2008 6:59 pm
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| Reviewer: tabbycat (Signed)
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This is really interesting. I'll be watching closely to see how it spans out. Is it a reverse story? Will Neville and Luna get together? I think they'd make a sweet couple, but totally strong too. Are the old scars from Snape's childhood? From Dumbledore? Is Harry supposed to know about Snapes past? Ooh - it's all exciting!
Glad you used the snow to good purpose. I'm outside Atlanta, and it was so much fun to watch it come down.
Now I'm really intrigued about what could have been happening to Snape. I loved how Harry got him mad to keep him going. I think it will make Snape think when he starts recovering.
And I can't wait to see what you will do with Draco. But why is Luna not in school since she's the same year as Ginny?
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