I just saw this one. Nice story. I'm curious to see more and where you go with it.
Good chapter! I liked Snape's last line saying that he can fly by flapping his arms about. I hope you'll find time to update again soon!
Love this story. When Snape makes him get out of bed, I laughed out loud in the English Department where I work.
Please write another chapter soon so we can see where these two go. Snape's announcing that he would be monitoring Harry's every move sounded so menacing and grim that I could see the fear on Harry's face.
Great job!
| Title: Chapter 3
| 14 Dec 2007 10:17 am
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| Reviewer: anna (Anonymous)
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thank you for the update. great chapter.
| Title: Chapter 3
| 14 Dec 2007 9:27 am
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| Reviewer: Eva (Signed)
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Wow!!! It was a very nice chapter though Harry was a little abrupt with Hermione.-sighs- That's to be expected, after all, it's his fifth year. Anyway, I really want to read the next chapter, you write wonderfully.
I'm really enjoying your story! Poor Harry and poor Severus...it's shaping up to be a Christmas to remember. Although they're both dreading it now, hopefully, it'll turn out better than they expect!
Looking forward to the next chapter!
That was a great chapter, poor Harry. Really looking forward to what happens next, and how Harry reacts to being in the dungeons. Keep up the great work and please update again soon. LES
I kind of like this. It's a good set-up, drawing out the meeting between Harry and Snape. Please update soon and give us something to read over Christmas.
I can't imagine how Snape will keep an eye on Harry - I see a lot of missed sleep and headaches since Harry was far from the ideal student in the 5th book.
Keep writing.
You have set this story up nicely. The reactions of everyone are believable and well-written and the situation that puts Severus in charge of Harry also makes sense given Book 5 canon. I'm looking forward to this story.
| Title: Chapter 2
| 13 Dec 2007 3:02 am
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| Reviewer: Becky (Anonymous)
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Citisen? What's a 'citisen?' Did you mean 'citizen?' Also, what does 'cal' mean? Did you intend to write 'call?'
I suggest you get a beta reader to help you with your spelling, grammar and punctuation. Your story would be a lot better if you took the time to fix the typos. Not to be mean, but your story sloppily written. I like your banner though.
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