That was one of the most sickening things I've ever read! I've read many stories with disgusting abusinve Dursleys, but this is worse than any of those I ever read!!!! Good or bad? I'll leave that up to you but I won't be reading any more of your stories! Not my cup of tea, not sure how it could be anyones. My rating is not a 0 because you do write well, just not material I personally care to read. Good luck with your future endeavors.
You should make a 2nd one it is so good. I need to know what happens
| Title: Chapter 1
| 21 Feb 2011 7:55 pm
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| Reviewer: Tina (Anonymous)
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Nice concept, but needs a beta's touch. Way too many spelling/grammatical errors and history should be worked into the story rather than a time line. No one knows who the characters are and should be introduced within the story as it's written so that we may connect with them emotionally. I know it takes a lot more work, but it's really the only way you can get away with having OC's in fanfiction. (Believe me, I know from experience!) All in all, I really like the concept of your story and there is tons of potential here.
loved the story verry origional, i have never read anything like it!!
so when is the next one coming out?
itym... "i am in your debt" not "you are in my debt"
| Title: Chapter 8
| 27 Jun 2008 11:20 pm
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| Reviewer: kate (Anonymous)
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wow, this really was short. lol. cant wait for the next longer chapter. :)
| Title: Chapter 7
| 20 Jun 2008 2:48 am
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| Reviewer: DracosLovers from ff.net (Anonymous)
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i think this story is very good and intriguing. i'm very interested in the whole dragon, elf, vampire thing. plz dont wait as long to update. i want to read more.
ps...its not the same vampire lord uncle that has him is it? that would be strange. anyways looking forward to the next chapter
good chapter, it really explains more about severus and james and what they have been through
good chapter, glad they found peter and sent him to the ministry, though i did expect abit of a fight, but i'm glad it turned out ok
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