| Title: Chapter 1
| 17 May 2008 6:37 pm
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| Reviewer: SnapesYukuai (Anonymous)
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OMG, that was unbelievable cute!!!!! I would be moooost happy about a multi chapter story about this. ^^ Your Melfis.
| Title: Chapter 1
| 16 May 2008 8:58 am
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| Reviewer: Mahia (Anonymous)
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Awww, cute story. Why did Harry fight him off though? And why is Harry as toddler? And why did he call Snape "Sev'us"?
Well done! Cute concept. Although I noticed a few typos, at the end it should be "the toddler placed HIS head"
and "sight of me in pain so amusing Potter" needs a comma between amusing and Potter. I think if you did another read through and read it out loud you would catch all the minor typos. Nice work!
Author's Response: Glad you liked it. Thanks for pointing out the grammar stuff. Commas are my weak point. They always have been, despite the best efforts of my English professor.
Aww, that was very sweet and quite amusing too!
| Title: Chapter 1
| 14 May 2008 11:21 pm
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| Reviewer: NotEvenHere (Anonymous)
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That was cute. :o) I love Harry's pronouncement at the end.
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