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Reviews For 3 Slytherin Marauders
I loved seeing Severus act so fatherly over Harry (and also somewhat Tom). The other thing that I loved was Lucius in his new "job". Poor man. ;-} I thought that it was funny that he had to have his house-elf come out to help him. ;-} The other thing that I thought was brilliant was the alias you picked for him. It took me a few seconds, but once I picked it up I laughed out loud. Very clever. ;-} All in all, I loved the chapter and I can't wait to see the next one. Leilia
I love your Slytherin Harry and the still whiny, but changed Draco. I never would have thought of pairing Lucius and Petunia together (and I know I far from the first to say this) but it has it's own merit. I think they make a cute couple.:) Now, Harry has a family and Draco is getting a real mother model and the three boys will be family instead of just friends (not that it mattered to them). Please, for my peace of mind can you have Albus knock some sense into Remus. He was supposed to be the level-headed Marauder. He should know better than to disparage a child's parent regardless of how they became a parent and who t he parent is. P.S. Forgive the rambling, I stayed up all night catching up with this story!
Dora and Tom are so cute^^ And I love the part about the Founders :) Greetings, Baltaine
I noticed a few typos crept into the chapter: occured (occurred), the Goblin hoard (the Goblin horde), seige (siege), duration of that persons lifetime (duration of that person’s lifetime), briuse (bruise), Cerebus (Cerberus)
I hope you won't mind that I made a list of the typos that need to be fixed. They're the only thing marring this excellent chapter! I put the correct spelling in parentheses: assitance (assistance), expiditing (expediting), acquiesed (acquiesced), infilitration (infiltration), privelage (privilege), apparantly (apparently), persue (pursue), they boys and girls (the boys and girls), arriveing (arriving), managable (manageable), spanish (Spanish), took off his hat – which (took off his hat – to which), extrodinary (extraordinary), sponsered (sponsored) (this typo happens three times), apparantly (apparently), decieving (deceiving) missing apostrophes: that houses qualities (that house’s qualities), their families origins (their families’ origins), jump on next years (jump on next year’s) If you want to delete this review once the typos are gone, I won't mind at all :-)
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