Nice! Snape and Harry are both in character to a perfect T. It is still a bit confusing though-if this is supposed to be before GoF, Harry would not know about the Order. I'm just going to assume that this is the summer after OoTP, because I am quite sure you meant it to be.
This is a great story so far, but one question: Do you mean this to take place after HP:OoTP, because if it was before The Goblet of Fire-Harry would not know of Moody nor of Grimmauld Place.
AWESOME! Please bring back his scar though-I mean Harry is not Harry without it. Also if you can please put in a bunch of accidental magic-it would be great to read- Because of his ordeal, Harry's magic increased so much he has trouble controlling it, or something like that. ALso please have Snape be his biological father.
This is an interesting story. I'd like to know where it goes and find out more about how Harry survived.
Please update and let Harry find out why he's know dead!
... the killing curse killed the horcrux inside harry? snape is nice to harry because he is harry's father? dobby ate your cheesecake?
i'm guessing snape comes into the room... considering what site this is posted on. why's he there? what happened? my curiosity is piqued
cool chapter!Please, update soon!
| Title: Chapter 4
| 03 Sep 2009 12:13 am
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| Reviewer: Min (Anonymous)
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Awesome chapter. Snape seems to be treating Harry really delicately without a lot of explanation as to why. Seems a little out of character of Harry being delicate without some more descriptions of how Harry is feeling. Interesting premise and idea that Harry was hit by the killing curse and has no memory now. I am anxious to hear more of what happened. Thanks for sharing the story!
By the way, "To be continued... " is showing up twice in this chapter and also shows up in the one before it. You might want to delete them, that phrase shows up automatically in the last chapter posted, unless the story is marked completed, then it shows up as "The End."
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