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Title: Chapter 1 – Five months later 21 Oct 2009 9:46 pm
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    Lol, nice! I'm so excited that you've come out with more (and uber excited about the up-and-coming story as well!). I'm very excited to see what Sev comes up with for his Alastor's birthday. My one criticism would be that the question "What do you wish for your birthday?" doesn't sound quite right. Now, I'm not an expert on British says, but in America, we usually ask "What do you want for your birthday?" I've never heard it the other way. It makes sense, but it doesn't flow as well, in my opinion.

    I can't wait for more though and was excited that you said this whole fic was already complete! I hope you post more soon!

    -P.G.

    Author's Response:

    I'm gad you like it. It seems not many people are interested in it, but no worry I will upload it all one or two days.

    Thanks for mentioning my mistake. I will change it. I just translated the sentence word by word from German and that was the result.

    Thank you very much for your review! I think I would have been very sad if nobody would have commented on it!

    Sunny 


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