Guh. This one was even better than the last botched potions story you put out. I can see your writing improve as you go along, though really, you were already absolutely amazing to start! I so appreciate your perfect characterizations. Especially Snape, whose voice and mannerisms are probably one of the hardest to replicate. I love everything about this story, from the way Harry and Neville are building each other up at the beginning of class, to the way Harry’s allergy starts affecting him, to Snape’s POV (I love the timing of it!), to that END. OMG. I love the way Harry wakes up to the billowing robes leaving. So in character. Bravo.
Wow! Love this! So often allergy attacks are written as humorous in fic but they really are terrifying. I always love to read a fic where it is taken seriously. Great job, very well written indeed. :)
You described an anaphylaxis/anaphylactic reaction perfectly. I know due to having one myself a long time ago. My mother told me what happened as I was 4 when it happened.
Basically it was just what you wrote. Superb job!!
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| 05 Feb 2014 9:25 am
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Great story and excellent characterisation thank you
Awww... he stayed until Harry woke up. Nice. Not keeping him company, eh? Well, I suppose technically that was true, the boy was unconscious afterall...lol.
Poor Neville, I suppose he got the cleanup job?
Great work - nicely done.
misundersnape...
Awesome. I'm a sucker for Harry passing out.
I love the way Severus figured out so quickly what caused the reaction... and putting Harry and Neville together in Potions class is bound to cause disaster :P
| Title: Anaphylaxis
| 29 Dec 2010 5:23 am
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| Reviewer: Oakleaf (Anonymous)
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Great story.
I really enjoy the way you have written this and the plot of the story.
Well done!
Aww. I was just browsing the archives and came across this. I think the end is my favourite part - made me very happy indeed.
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