| Title: Chapter 1
| 13 Feb 2014 6:08 pm
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| Reviewer: kathyjo (Anonymous)
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I enjoyed the story more would be good..one thing I would have like to hear reasoning on is why Ron in Hufflepuff (the house of loyalty) I found Ron to be petty and jealous to be in hufflepuff
Its a sweet story but it could be better. Take another look at the story flow and look it over again for grammar. All in all a really good attempt.
Brilliant! I'd love to see more of this story.
I love it very well written a few spelling mistakes but nothing major
I love this and want more. Wish I was a writer. I want to see how Harry and Sev's relationship develops and how this change, one man's love for a child, his child, chnages Harry's outcome.....Is old moldy voldie suppose to be totally dead in this story?? I'd like to see a "happily ever after" for our boys.
just wondering... did you mean to make this a round robin?
Please continue the story. You changed the sorting of some important characters. That will cause an interesting 'butterfly effect'.
I rather enjoyed it. It is a good start. If you want to continue with this story, go for it.
I was wondering why Draco is in Ravenclaw
very nice Snape being a little OOC but good nonetheless
How I loved this one off snap gets to show his good side
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