This was a good chapter. I really sympathied with Harry and his panic over Snape signing those papers.
One thing I just must add is that one really shouldn't switch POVs in the same chapter without a clear divider. It is generally done that you stay in one character's head or another; but not both.
Other than that though, this was quite enjoyable! I'm looking forward to the next chapter! :-)
Oooh, this is quite a start to a new story. Waking up in the hospital is never a good thing, is it?
Moving on... :-)
this is great, i want to read more!
Nice story! I like where it's going. Snape and Harry both seem quite "real". Very good so far.
Great first two chapters! Poor Harry! I can't wait to see where you take this!
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| 20 Mar 2011 2:19 pm
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| Reviewer: Kristi (Anonymous)
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I can't wait to see where you take this story. I wonder how Severus will react when learning that Harry was never the spoiled brat he thought he was.
I like this story. I can't find fault with your verbatim, and I feel like the characters are in character for the most part. I can't wait for the next chapter to find out how Snape deals with Harry.
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| 20 Mar 2011 10:01 am
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| Reviewer: Chuckle (Anonymous)
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Very well written so far... Snape is his canon self - can´t wait to see how the relationship between him and Harry progresses.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
| Title: Master Snape
| 20 Mar 2011 9:22 am
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| Reviewer: Shadow (Anonymous)
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Well, it would be interesting when the truth about Harry's upbringing will come to the light...
Up so now it is very interesting. I'm looking forward the next chapter =o)
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