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Title: Lost and Found 19 Sep 2011 3:13 pm
Reviewer: Nightshade sydneylover150 (Signed) [Report This]
    Ah. That was a really sweet little story. My only suggestion is to go through and either add text between the sentences that are in quotes or delete the extra quotations.

    For example: “Your safe Harry and you are never going back there, I promise.” “Your're going to stay here with me no matter what.”


    Either write “Your safe Harry and you are never going back there, I promise.”Snape whispered softely. “Your're going to stay here with me no matter what.”

    Or combine it into one long quotation: “Your safe Harry and you are never going back there, I promise. Your're going to stay here with me no matter what.”
Title: Lost and Found 17 Sep 2011 11:32 am
Reviewer: slytherensangel26 (Signed) [Report This]
    hahaha cute. i love fluffy fics!
Title: Lost and Found 17 Sep 2011 7:13 am
Reviewer: Sita Z (Signed) [Report This]
    Nice story! I can see Vernon and Petunia cooking up a plan to abandon Harry. It was sweet to see Harry encounter a trustworthy adult for the first time!
    Just a very minor point, there were a few spelling/grammar issues (you're/your, for instance), but those are easily fixed, and didn't detract much from the story.
    I'd love to read a sequel to this!
Title: Lost and Found 16 Sep 2011 7:57 pm
Reviewer: mworth1019 (Signed) [Report This]
    nice!
Title: Lost and Found 16 Sep 2011 7:33 pm
Reviewer: Severus Draconis Potter (Signed) [Report This]
    My story was looking a litle lonely so, i'll review, its fluffy and cute and sweet, so if you get a cavity from it I aploogize lol

    Then again this review shouldnt count I'm biased lol
Title: Lost and Found 16 Sep 2011 4:51 pm
Reviewer: Hobbit (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Nice story, just a couple of grammatical whatsits: You don't need separate sets of speech marks for each sentence if it's the same person speaking. And you tend to skip commas where there should be a pause. So

    “Why are you outside this time of night child?” “Aren’t your parents going to be worried about you?”

    would just be

    “Why are you outside this time of night, child? Aren’t your parents going to be worried about you?”

    And the your in the second-to-last line should be you're - it's short for You Are.

    Once again, it's a really nice story, just fixing those small things makes it flow a lot better =)

    Author's Response: Cool thanks those are all fixed up and thanks for reading

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