Really wish there was more.
This is very interesting. I hope that you continue this story soon. :)
Need more... So addicted...
*sniff sniff* poor harry. you better help him Severus or i'm going to come into this story and kick your ass. this was a really great chapter. i cant wait for the next chapter. thank you for the story. :)
What a fabulous start.
I'm hooked.
| Title: Ch 1: A Startling Discovery
| 05 Feb 2012 3:31 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Good start but just a few pointers in a spirit of friendly advice.
Please start a new line when a different person talks in a paragraph. Also I'm afraid a lot of the sayings of especially Vernon are not known to me as an English person and he would not have said them. However a good start thank you
| Title: Ch 1: A Startling Discovery
| 04 Feb 2012 1:06 pm
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| Reviewer: JAWorley (Signed)
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I think you have a good start, but some of the things in this chapter could use a little more development so that they don't feel rushed. Sometimes it is worth an extra sentence here or there to explain things to the reader more in-depth. I like your writing style though and you're doing good!
Okay I'll bite, what happens next?
| Title: Ch 1: A Startling Discovery
| 03 Feb 2012 7:37 pm
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| Reviewer: JWOHPfan (Signed)
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Great start, though a a better question to ask might be will your reader's be satisfied with Dumbledork's answer!!!!
Great start, can't wait to see where it goes! Keep up the great work! ;)
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