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Title: Chapter 24 In the poisonous trailings of a Blast-Ended Skrewt 25 May 2015 10:43 am
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    Severus in cannon was very explosive especially where Harry was concerned. I'm thinking here of PoA at the end in classes. I don't think your writing is overboard! Thank you so much for the two chapters

    Author's Response: Thanks :-)
Title: Chapter 23 Which father? 23 May 2015 2:41 pm
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    Excellent chapter! Not sure how they can get worse apart from the animagus revelations

    Author's Response: Thanks! Harry's animagus will not be revealed for the time being. Prof McGonagall is upset with Harry but not to the point of betraying him. Maybe you've read chapter 24 by now, otherwise, please do so :-)
Title: Chapter 24 In the poisonous trailings of a Blast-Ended Skrewt 22 May 2015 1:06 am
Reviewer: Anna (Anonymous) [Report This]
    wow love it! especially chapte 24, it was so intense! By the way thank you for those double updates, they are grately apprevciated:) Can't wait for more!

    Author's Response: Thank you! 
Title: Chapter 24 In the poisonous trailings of a Blast-Ended Skrewt 21 May 2015 7:28 pm
Reviewer: teriwright (Signed) [Report This]
    This was a fantastic chapter! I loved the confrontation. I hate that I love watching Snape finally crack, just a bit. We finally get a glimpse into his true thoughts instead of interpreting his actions and how he's dealing with all these issues. What his fears are. Just fantastic! It actually gave me a bit of hope for some weird reason.

    I also loved seeing Harry's reaction (the knives into the door where Snape had just been) and a crack in his facade as well. This is one time where Harry has more experience and knowledge that Snape LOL

    Author's Response: Thanks!
Title: Chapter 23 Which father? 21 May 2015 6:40 pm
Reviewer: teriwright (Signed) [Report This]
    Jesus Christ! I go away from this site for a week at look what happens to a favorite story of mine :-) Half a dozen new chapters! yay! I'm sure this review will be equally long.

    I love the magic you create and use in this story. I just love it! So many authors write in the HP fandom but rarely have magic in their stories. A perfect example is Harry conjuring his tea cup and floating the milk and teapot. Of course magical students would take every opportunity to use magic for every little thing. Oh, and the thing with the newspapers transfigured into various flying creatures? Awesome!

    But, the continued actions of Snape towards Harry are breaking my heart every time a new chapter comes out.

    Also, Harry is being driven to the ground day by day and won't push back or take action. He's being defeated by those he saved. And reacting to school mate taunts with a hex is not taking action. It's reacting that does no good. He still has a lot to learn.

    His reputation and chances of a happy future in Brittan are kaput at this point IMHO. Even if the journalism profession is completely overhauled, the name of Potter is now suspicious and not to be trusted. There's no un-doing this kind of thing. He could jump through hoops for the rest of his life trying to prove himself again and again to people who don't deserve it and it'll change nothing.

    And Steadfast, WTF is her problem? I seriously want to smack her. She is frequently unprofessional and obviously does not work well with a team ie: sharing info and instructions. Like that Harry was supposed to inform her of his school yard fights?? If she was such a great auror, she'd already be investigating this w/o Harry having to spoon feed her. /rant *sheepish* sorry about that ;-)

    Sigh, if I were harry, I would be bitterly regretting fighting voldemort instead of just warning all his loved one's of his plans to not fight and leaving the UK. The "people" don't deserve Harry nor his blood, sweat, magic and sacrifice.

    I hope there is a light at the end of the tunnel for these two. I also hope the Daily prophet is exposed for the propaganda machine they really are.

    Sigh... one can only wish :-)

    Ok, last point: Are we going to address Snape's thievery? i'm sorry, I just can't mentally let it go. But I will refrain from mentioning it again.

    Author's Response: Thanks for the long review, it's entertaining :-) I promise: in two chapters, the "thievery" will be adressed!
Title: Chapter 24 In the poisonous trailings of a Blast-Ended Skrewt 21 May 2015 4:28 pm
Reviewer: tb_ll57 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I adored the Harry&Snape. Snape reaching his breaking point precisely because Harry is taking this so calmly is very interesting-- not quite a role reversal, since they've never been calm together, but an interesting comment on their particular stresses. I was watching my niece this past weekend and thinking about how injustice is the worst thing for kids; they absolutely can't bear unfairness, and Harry was like that in the books, of course. But as he grows up he reacts less to unfairness-- for instance Snape being offputting in the classroom-- and more to real injustice, but especially if it's happening to someone else, not himself. His empathy for Snape is very moving, and coming as it does with some sacrifice on Harry's part it feeds so well into Harry's emotional maturity in this story. He's become a real leader in ways he never was in the books, someone who makes conscious decisions rather than just reacting all the time, and whose decisions are well-thought out and based in compassion. And poor Snape definitely needs compassion right now...

    Author's Response:

    Thank you! And there will be more of that compassion in the next chapter… 

Title: Chapter 23 Which father? 21 May 2015 12:18 pm
Reviewer: tb_ll57 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I like that this chapter demonstrates the up-tick of tensions with the Slytherins feeling emboldened to jibe as well. Things are getting back to normal at Hogwarts when Malfoy's being nasty again. But you also show how abnormal things are with the constant oversight of the Aurors and how quickly everyone accused Harry of Dark Magic; Harry's been in plenty of trouble over the years, but it seems the stories are starting to bias Hogwarts staff and Aurors alike to think the worst of him as well as Snape...

    Author's Response:

    I can just imagine that during a drive in the press like the one Snape and Harry are subjected to it is difficult for anyone to stay objective. Unfortunately, even the ones supposed to be on your side will be influenced and a little biased, I think. The reactions of Mrs Steadfast, Mme Pomfrey and of Prof McGonagall illustrate just that.

Title: Chapter 24 In the poisonous trailings of a Blast-Ended Skrewt 21 May 2015 7:49 am
Reviewer: ohmysnape (Signed) [Report This]
    I thought the conversation between Sev and Harry was perfect. It was my favorite part of the two chapters just updated with! Very believable, and nice to see that human side of Severus that still tortures himself with guilt over Lily. And Harry's reaction was even better!

    Author's Response: Thank you! Nice to know that scene worked out and, yes, it's finally time for S to show that he is human after all :-)
Title: Chapter 22 A Boggart to be laughed at 18 May 2015 7:47 am
Reviewer: Buchling (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I like this story a lot and I feel the characters are well balanced and believable. However ever so often you leave things kind of unfinished; like the incompetency of the healer lady or Harrys paper published under Snapes name. There were a couple more things that I can't recall right now. I just wondered if that's simply your way of writing, most things are not completely resolved in real life after all, or if there's somekind of plan to it.

    Author's Response:

    Thanks for reviewing and for your observation about unfinished things. My answer is that I do have a plan, mostly. I have ”planted” several things that will be ”picked up” and explained later on in the story. I worry a bit, though, that the story is too slow and that you have to wait too long to get some answers and that the readers will get frustrated, or wonder, like you, if it will not lead anywhere… Maybe it is this thing with posting once a weak - maybe you would get another impression if you were to read the chapters in more rapid succession… Or maybe it is simply my inexperience as a writer - this is after all my first fanfiction story :-)  

     

    The Acromantula paper will be brought up again in exactly three chapters from now. The incompetent healer will make a reappearance later on in the story, but in her case, like you said, my point is more to show that there are, also in real life, people around, even authorities, even professionals, who are incompetent and who make bad decisions and that you simply have to deal with, in some way or other. 

     

     

    Thank you for appreciating the portrayal of the characters. I try not to make them too unidimensional. And I prefer, in this story, both Snape and Harry to be resourceful rather than helpless and broken, without acquiring that impersonal status of Super power wizards, however.


Title: Chapter 22 A Boggart to be laughed at 17 May 2015 11:52 am
Reviewer: Anna (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I really enjoy reading this story :D!! It is just fantastic! Thanks for two new chapters! So will Harry's animagus form be known? I can just see Ritas cat cought the canary grin - more slling headlines:P;) Looking forward to much more!

    Author's Response: Thanks! Rita Skeeter is not finished yet with plaguing our heroes, alas! Much more coming any day now :-)

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