The summary was awesome, I was really into it, but then the point of view things are confusing, like more so. I dislike all stories that start from the first person but I can let it go to read a Sev and Harry one cause I love them so.
However the fact that it constantly switches POV, has my head hurting. Regretfully this story isnt for me, but good luck with the rest of it.
| Title: So this is Potter, the one i never saw.
| 04 Feb 2015 6:07 am
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| Reviewer: LOVE4SPOCK (Signed)
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I hope you will continue this story.
Please update soon! I'm looking forward to more!
:-)
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Author's Response: I'm working on it I promise :-D I'm glad you like it too XD
| Title: So this is Potter, the one i never saw.
| 04 Feb 2015 3:23 am
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| Reviewer: atiaahmed (Signed)
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Hey, you have nice ideas but I would stick to one POV at least for one chapter. It forces you to explore only one perspective and then you also have to think about questions like 'what does this character know and how does he process new information because of this? what would he think in this situation? is there a discrepancy between what he says/thinks and what he does?' Its interesting especially in Snape&Harry stories, because in the outset they mostly have vastly different views, so its interesting to read how they interpret the same situation completely differently. And interesting story to read for this is 'A year like none other' by aspeninthesunlight, she plays with different conclusions to the same facts quite often and sticks to harrys perspective (or third person from harrys pov) through almost the whole story.
| Title: So this is Potter, the one i never saw.
| 03 Feb 2015 6:35 pm
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| Reviewer: heartstar (Anonymous)
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poor harry .. I look forward to more chapters when you can :)
Can't wait to read more! Please update again soon! :)
I look forward to reading more!
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! :) So many peolpe have read it but no ones leaving comments XD Happy you enjoyed it and the next chapet should be up just after christmas :D
| Title: How could I've not seen?
| 20 Dec 2014 7:37 pm
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| Reviewer: Pandora (Signed)
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Oh no.
Poor Harry. I hope that snape can rescue him and protect him, from this abuse.
great story. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing XD Not many people are and I'm glad you enjoyed it :P The next updte will be just before christmas hopefully :D
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