I'd like to see a sequel where Albus gets his.
I think you meant Remus and Harry. Not Remus and Lupin as they are the same person. But great story so far.
If I was him I'd have kicked myself.
Title: Chapter 9
| 13 May 2016 12:48 am
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Reviewer: Slytherin_Serpent (Anonymous)
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MOREMORE MORE MORE MORE MORE LOL love it
Title: Chapter 8
| 18 Apr 2016 11:07 pm
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Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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Ummm.... I don't know what to say. You had an ok story going, and then ended it like this???? Did you forget where you wanted to the end the story??? The previous 7 chapters were the start of a decent story. This just felt rushed.
How about a description of how they got out of the cell. How did Snape and Harry end up working together? How did they get over their animosity? Why did they never tell their friends they were alive? How did they actually win the war? Were there Horcruxes?
Just some ideas.....
Author's Response: Thank you for your ideas.The ending was rushed and as a result cruel since it gave no answers.There is a good chance it will be rewritten at some point.
You both are bastards!!!!
Title: Chapter 5
| 29 Mar 2016 1:24 pm
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Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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Sounds like an interesting story, though the plot is exactly like "Prisoners" by Whitetail.
Harry isn't dealing with his grief, so old magic de-ages him. Dumbledore sends him to a safe house where Snape is. Eventually Snape & Harry bond.
Hi, I'm quite enjoying your story so far. As Twinheart said, I think there's something wrong with chapter 4. Also, wasn't Harry injured? Did I miss the part where he got healed? Please keep writing!
Interesting beginning- you might want to re-check all of your chapters, though. I don't know if there is a problem with your uploading, or auto-edit, but many paragraphs have incomplete sentences, missing words, etc. It was a bit difficult to follow in some places. I look forward to reading a corrected version.
wish it was a little longer each chapter but otherwise so far so good will be keeping an eye out on this story.
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