Beautifully written, with good dialogue and character interaction. I'm interested in seeing where you're going with this plot
Crying? Girl? Fighting stick?
Sounds like something will HAPPEN!
DUN DUN DUN!
What will?
| Title: Chapter 1: Hallways
| 02 Dec 2005 1:28 am
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| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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Wow, I don't know how I missed this story. Well here I am! I liked this first chapter, the writing and everything was great! I would have given it a 7/10 but the girl at the end gave me pause, I'm usually wary of female original characters just popping up. but you can never tell right away if a character is going to be a Mary Sue or not so... is there more of this story to read?
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